The area marked in blue needs to be changed. Deleted or rewritten completely. It seems confusing. If the Protagonist is having an out of body experience, you need this to be portrayed clearly. One minute she is is out in the field chasing a suspect, and the next she is being awoken by someone at the station. For instance, if Olivia has any supernatural abilities, you might want to hint at it here.

It does not read very well, because you have tried to use present day with what happened in the past. The last sentence ‘Olivia, wake up. She needs you.’ Is not clear to me who needs her. I’m guessing the one who needs her is the child or person screaming/ Olivia heard in the woods earlier. But if they are now in the Police Station, surely the woman or child who screamed is now in a location of safety.

You could rewrite this using narration, by introducing the supernatural abilities Olivia has, but doesn’t know she possesses. After the paragraph: I couldn’t move…. That’s when you explain that Olivia experienced a mind jump. This is the crucial bit where you explain her supernatural abilities. You could explain what happened or leave it vague. How Olivia saw a struggle taking place, which seemed to render her frozen to the spot… and then she fainted. Maintain an air of mystery throughout, hint at the time frame. How long was she out? Keeping it brief. Either re-write or delete this section altogether.

I lifted my head up startled, blinking at the fluorescent lights of the station’s break room. I felt disoriented for a moment, my lungs struggling to catch enough oxygen, as the remnants of whatever I was dreaming about still held me paralyzed in fear. {Join to paragraph} Deep breaths, Blackwood. Come on. It was just a dream. Or was it? {include} That was just my brain’s way of processing the grim crime scene from last night. There were photos of the body spread all over the table, and that was probably the last thing I saw before giving into exhaustion. That’s all. Nothing to it. {Delete}